改善choppy sentence(太多短句)
例子:
原文:
My family left our homeland. Then we lived in a refugee camp. Then we got our documents. Then we traveled to Canada. And we live there now.
可以看出,原文有很多短句,很零碎,不适合作为书面用语。
改善后:
After my family left our homeland, we lived in a refugee camp for several months. As soon as we got our documents, we traveled to Canada, where we live now.
改善步骤
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We must find new sources of energy. Natural sources of energy are decreasing. Solar energy is a promising new source of energy. Solar energy is energy from the sun.
答案:
We must find new sources of energy because natural sources of energy are dwindling. Solar energy, which is energy from the sun, is a promising new source.
参考资料:
- Alice Oshima, Ann Hogue. Writing Academic English (4th ed.). 2006.
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