Hi James:
I'm a student of HenNan Polytechnic Unniversity, and going study abroad. I'm so glad you are reading this e-mail. I'm just touching base with you, and wondering if your unniversity would take any students this fall.
I will attend IELTS next month, and I'd like to get scholarship. So, I'm not sure whether I can have it or not ? I also know you are one of expert associated with computer. If any chance, I hope you can provide me a opportunity to visit you.
Warmest regards.
Steve
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Dear Prof. James:
I'm Steve, an undergraduate student at Henan Polytechnic University,in Jiaozuo, Henan. My degree is Computer Science and Technology and this year I will be starting my final year of the courses. It makes me so delighted that you read my e-mail.
I have always been very interested in studying abroad for my masters and plan on taking the IELTS exam soon. Therefore, I read your university's information and the requirements of the student you want. Fortunately, my GPA and others meet them. So, the e-mail is contacting you for more details. And I wonder if you would be so kind to allow me to visit you, for I would very much like to admire the person whose books everwhere and hopefully we have a desirable conversation.
Kind regards.
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I wonder if you would be so kind to allow me to visit, for I would very much like to admire close-up how such a legendary place is run and talk about cooperation possibilities.
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