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Lesson 10 Not for jazz 不适于演奏爵士乐

We have an old musical instrument. It is called a clavichord(翼琴). It was made in Germany in 1681. Our clavichord is kept in the living-room. It has belonged to our family for a long time. The instrument was bought by my grandfather many years ago. Recently it was damaged by a visitor. She tried to play jazz on it! She struck the keys too hard and two of the strings were broken. My father was shocked. Now we are not allowed to touch it. It is being repaired by a friend of my father's.

Knowledges

• keep
  • keep sth: If you keep something, you continue to have it in your possession and do not throw it away, give it away, or sell it. eg. The Clavichord was kept by me.
  • keep sth prep/adv/adj. If you keep something in a particular place, you always have it or store it in that place so that you can use it whenever you need it. The Clavichord was kept in my bedroom.
• belong to
  • sth belongs to sb.

  • the body belonged to a 15-year-old girl
    - sb belong in/to a group/club
    - sth belong to an era/time
    - > the two children belonged to the couple

• be being repaired by ...

From The Visitor's View:

Recently, I went to Jane's home' who is my classmate'[=> . Jane is one of my classmates :170125]. There is[=> was :170125] a[=> an :170125] old strange piona[=> piano :170125] in her living room. Jane said it was called Clavichord and it was made in Germany in 1681. And it was bought by his grandfather many year[=> years :170125] ago. Then I tried to play a jazz on it. It sounded good at the beginning, but some strings were broken when I was playing the climax, because I pressed the keys too strong. Her father is[=> was :170125] angry about that and don't[=> didn't :170125] allowed any of us to touch it any more. Then he requests[=> requrested] his friend, a piano repairman, to repair it.

Knowledges

• I went to Jane's home who ... => I went to my classmate Jane's home
• too strong => too hard
• angry about it => angry about that
• allow sb to do / sb be allowed to do
• request 比 ask 正式, 这里好像不是很好

From Jane's Father's View:

We kept an old musical instrumenr which is called Clavichord in the living room for a long time. It was bought by my father many years ago when I was a boy. It was took care by us for many years. One of my daughter Jane's classmate[=> classmates :170125] call[=> called :170125] at my home this Sunday. She was very interesting in the Clavichord. But she pressed the keys too hard and broken two of the strings because she played jazz on it. I was shocked to hear that. This Clavichord was treated as a treasured possesion in our family and then I 'do'[=> did :170125] not allowed the kids to touch it any more. I asked 'my friend'[=> one of my firends :170125] ''[=> , ] who is a piano repairman ''[=> , ] for help to repair it.

Knowledges

• a long time = quite a while = a fairly long time
• call (visit)
  • ~ round (短时间)拜访，看望
  • ~ on sb 顺路拜访
  • call (in) at some place 造访某处
  • call into 图书馆之类的
• 最后一句感觉想表达的太多了, 不太通顺

Remembers

• call (visit)
  • ~ round (短时间)拜访，看望
  • ~ on sb 顺路拜访
  • call (in) at some place 造访某处
  • call into 图书馆之类的

(作文时间: 2016年12月23日, 耗时: 70分钟)

30天后修改意见

细节的错误比较多, 不通顺或者有歧义改了些.

(修改时间: 2017-01-25, 耗时: 10 分钟)