What the formula taught me is that every story and novel is collapsible （可压缩的）to some degree. If you can't get out ten percent of it while retaining the basic story and flavor, you're not trying very hard.
Revise for Better
2017-4-14 < On Writing> P221-228
No.1:
I got a scribbled comment that changed the way I rewrote my fiction once and forever. Jotted below the machine-generated signature of the editor was this mot: “Not bad, but puffy. You need to revise for length. Formula: 2nd Draft= 1st Draft-10%. Good Luck."
scribbled：潦草的
「联想」之前分析过-scribe抄写员- ascribe归因于, 今天继续看scribbled意思为潦草的，scribbler（a person who writes for a living or as a hobby) 耍笔杆子的人, 发现作者Stephen King用这个字根的单词特别多，简直是大全了！
mot：a witty remark
「联想」moth飞蛾，一个有关飞蛾的mot
puffy：浮肿的，肿胀的
「拆分」puff+y ：puff意为喘气，少量（n）puffs of cloud一缕缕云
「地道短语」be out of puff气喘吁吁
huff and puff ： breathe heavily with exhaustion: express one's annoyance in an obvious or threatening way.
No.2:
I got used to the sort of rejection note that starts Dear Contributor and so came to relish any little personal dash on these printed pink-slips. They were few and far between, but when they came they never failed to lighten my day and put a smile on my face.
「联想」relish：享受 relish the fish.
「地道短语」have no relish for不喜欢，不感兴趣
slip 滑倒v.小错误n.
「地道短语」a slip of the tongue/pen: a small mistake you make when you are speaking or writing, especially by using the wrong word 口误/笔误〔尤指误用词语〕
「地道短语」pink-slips 解雇通知书 Green Slip--强制险；Blue Slip--是保险和车检过期之后作的车检
「地道短语」few and far between 极为罕见
No.3:
Nevertheless, you need to beware--if you slow the pace down too much, even the most patient reader is apt to grow restive.
restive: 躁动不安的,难驾驭的
「拆分」restive= rest休息，安息+ ive
「地道短语」be apt to 易于做某事
每天3-5个单词解析，记住你不需等到记住所有前后缀，或者看一本词汇书才能像我这样写解析。其实你现在就可以，运用联想*语境*拆分，使用电子词典，从音和形两方面入手溯本求源，透析词汇！也只有您自己写的，联想的，才是最生动有趣的！何况每个人的单词储备和欠缺都是不同的。你需要的不是高级字典，而是高级字典式的思维！其中奥妙与欢乐，总要试一试才能感受得到哦(^-^)
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