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FiX托福,璇哥干货系列の写作

FiX托福,璇哥干货系列の写作

作者: conv | 来源:发表于2018-11-05 14:28 被阅读0次

    现在,FiX决定重启“看滚睡”活动,让更多的同学加入我们,一起学习,快乐分手托福!

    璇哥写作 Episode 1

    今天给大家带来的干货,是就今天的托福考试题目的分析,我们先来看一下题目:

    With the development of the society, people couldn’t make sure that their skills are the most updated. Therefore, government wants to provide individuals who are older than 25 a chance to take a course to promote skills. Do you think it is effective for government to spend money on it?

    这个题目首先是个新题,上周的两个题目都是老题目,所以也该出一道新题了,然后题干是比较长,可能光读题解题就要花一番时间。但是透过题目看本质,这个题目最重要的核心是什么呢?如果用TCD做拆分的话,不难看出,【25岁以上】、【提高技术】这两个其实是题目中的核心,另外题目本身问题的【effective】,但是并没有明确说是对谁,联系题目中第一句话说的是人们,那其实我们可以一段写人,一段写其它方面比如政府、公司。也就是说,这个题目本质上,是一道政策类隐性目的的题目。下面放出文章的框架思路。

    开头段:

    Fast development of modern technology not only brings advancement of the society, but also leads to worries from people towards their competitiveness, since they couldn’t make sure they could alway master the latest techniques. Under such circumstance, some people suggest that it would be effective for government to spend money on providing employees the chance to take a course for promoting their professional skills. In my view, this policy would make the goal.

    分析:

    第一句是背景句,相当于对题目背景的一点改写,之后就把问题提出,并且给出自己的观点,这是一段标准的璇哥开头段写法,注意这次换了一个新的提出观点的表达:【make the goal】,用来表示对这个政策的赞同。

    主体段一主题句:

    The free promoting course policy would help employees to get themselves enhanced to grasp the current state-of-the-art working skills, causing them to be more competitive.

    分析:

    主题句直接写明这个政策对雇员的好-获得新技术,提高竞争力。然后内部扩展就是一个标准的三傻职业列举法:程序猿可以参加专门的课程培训了解最新的编程框架和测试技巧甚至还可以了解最先进的运维技术,让自己的写代码的工作更加的高效少出错;销售可以学习最新的互联网销售技巧,而不是传统的面对面推销,可以用最短的时间获取大量的潜在客户;设计师也可以学习专门的课程讲解最新的设计工具,更好的利用数位板来做图,告别纯手工,提高工作效率。

    主体段二主题句:

    In addition, although the investment of this policy could cost much, governmenteventually would get paid back. Since employees with latest technique could help make better products for their enterprises, and the following increasing sales would bring more profits and so as to present more taxes to the government.

    分析:

    主题句直接写这政策对政府有好处。第二句是逻辑补充句,后面就是一个标准的报道法了,可以说某个城市财政收入去年增加,就是因为政府给IT行业的员工提供免费培训的机会,然后这帮人技术提高了以后,回到公司帮忙优化产品,比如将以前人力运维全部改用自动化运维,节省了人力成本并投入研发,产品质量更好,得到热卖,公司盈利政府税收增加。

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