![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/b7ac9f3304d1a411.jpg)
作文解析:
1、请以“叮嘱”为题,即以“叮嘱”为题目,属命题作文,故绝对不能改题目(全班有两位同学没有审清题意)。
2、生活中来自亲人、老师、朋友等的叮嘱会有很多,但要有所选择,可选其中一件事重点呈现,也可从不同角度选择多个材料全面呈现,因此,可选择线形结构,也可选择块状结构。
3、无论选择哪种结构,无论选择几个材料,全文都应有一个集中的主题(可在开头或结尾,以点题的形式,用简洁的语言揭示主题),且围绕主题确定详写与略写。注意块状结构应是几个并列的详尽描绘的片断。
4、无论哪种结构,文中都应将叮嘱的内容具体化,将与“叮嘱”相关的生活场景细致描绘出来。
下面是两种结构的示范,同学们可根据以上解析,对下面作文做具体评析与借鉴。
块状结构:
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/a8905d5d6a2e1d6a.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/8847f7fb62ad8b8f.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/4641bb0e4ca7e89c.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/a8e5870b82ccb436.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/9911f65a0abac433.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/a98a5a2df6aed574.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/e67bc629d1d6c2ea.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/350503254088b018.jpg)
线形结构:
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/c946e5dccfdfd537.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/911c6af5df16b7c6.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/d2d1632f53e9f77d.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/ac493589f82b3a47.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/e64f0ff62e716041.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/86e9853dcc691b6c.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/949e64c6ce5e8db2.jpg)
![](https://img.haomeiwen.com/i8068174/9cdc6c9a6b9b808b.jpg)
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