声明
因为英语不好而丢了脸（详情请看我2月15日的文章《关于英文写作刻意练习》）
所以本文是练习英语用的
故此文中含有许多错误
欢迎朋友们指正，不甚感谢…
上一篇文章 A Colorful Day 存在的问题，感谢写作日更群胡晓光老师指出：
一、时态错误
全文应该用一般过去时，我通篇都用的现在进行时。
二、语法错误
我的原句：there is a lot of housework should be done.
修正：there is a lot of houseworkto do.
原因：there is 句法里 housework 自动转被动。
我的原句：First of all, I wash the windows and clean the curtains, it take me a long time.
修正：First of all, I wash the windows and clean the curtains,whichtake me a long time.
原因：如果想用it，前面用句号。
三、建议
1.多用从句，这样写看起来比较连贯。
2.逗号的使用需要注意，有些地方应该是句号。
今日练习：看图作文（请原谅这诡异的画风，我选资料时大意了。）
A Good Boy
Yesterday was Sunday, December 26, 1999. Li Ping got up at 6:00 a.m. in the morning, it was a sunny day.
So, Li Ping decided to go out and play football with his classmates, so he called Potter and Dan, two of his best friends.
Potter said:"That's great ! I didn't play football for a long time ! I will call my brother to join us, let have fun !"
Li Ping was very happy, the more friends he play football with, the happier he will be, so he took his football and rode to school as fast as he can.
When he arrived school, that's amazing ! Potter and his brother, Dan, Tom, Mark and Bill was all be there, they were waiting for Li Ping.
From 7:00a.m.to 9:00 a.m., Li Ping and his friends played very happily, and also, they were all very tired. So they all went to home at 9:30 a.m..
Li Ping was tired when he was back home, but he didn't take a rest at all. Instead, he began to clean the room himself because his mother will come back home at noon after a long business trip. He wanted to give his mother a big surprise.
In addition to clean the room, Li Ping also cooked the lunch, his mother taught him to do some cooking in the past, so he prepared a great lunch for his mother easily.
Two hours later, it was 12:00o’clock, Li Ping's mother came back home on time. When she saw the foods and soups on the table, she was really happy and deeply moved.
She said:"Oh, dear Li, you are a good boy, I'm really proud of you and I miss you very much these days."
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