题目
Write a paragraph describing an e-commerce site you have used or heard about. Comment on the site's functionality and product range. How does it compare to similar sites?
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Agreement: I would like you to please kindly remember that we use the verb to be 'are' with plural nouns such as 'words'. You wrote, "Its catching words is this..." for example. It would be better to write, "Its catching words are this..." instead. Word choice: I also noticed that you used the noun 'fashion' where you wrote, "The tmall.com is the upgraded fashion of the taobao.com". I suggest using the noun 'version' to write, "tmall.com is the upgraded version of taobao.com" instead. We do not use definite articles ('the') before the name of websites in English.
Start with amazon.com and then google.com, I have experienced very convenient online purchasing, and witnessed a few online companies who started from a scratch and now have grown up to be global giants. Recently, I am frequenting tmall.com, a new all-inclusive online market built up by a Chinese e-commerce giant, Mr. Ma Yun. Its catching words are this: “Tmall.com, one stop for everything.” Tmall.com is the upgraded version of Taobao.com, another everything-included online market previously built up by Mr. Ma. Besides its broad product range offering abundant choices and selections, Tmall.com excels also at good website usability, high-quality products, diverse payment and delivery options, technical support and product knowledge in customer service, etc. The difference between tmall.com and taobao.com is fundamental. Initially, taobao.com provided virtual spaces for other vendors, mostly small businesses and let them do business on their own. Years later, Taobao.com has been overwhelmed by inferior imitations for which Mr. Ma was blamed. Now tmall.com is supervised more directly by Mr. Ma’s business management team, and has a stringent requirement for other business vendors to join in. See! Now I am enjoying my shopping. All of the things I want are available from the home page with a navigation bar at the top that will allow users to go directly to different product categories. TheWeb design is really creative. Incorporating the brand colors into the design, the sites are colorful with their background, eye-catching buttons and logos and fascinating sales pitches, etc. By clicking the product thumbnails I can see the general descriptions, a convenient shopping cart is ready at hand. However, the whole site looks very familiar to you. You don’t have to figure out how the site works. Easy! Shopping online is as much fun as going to the mall. Actually, they have such good online deals. Go with tmall.com.
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