许多的中国雅思考生对雅思写作非常的“惧怕”因为从小的英语学习环境,和应试形英语教育让雅思考生在雅思写作中出现的很多的写作方式都是中式的表达。在这样的表达之下,不论你的雅思大作文观点如何好,论据如何棒,都会因为阅卷官看不懂而四大皆空,低分飘过。
针对这一个现象,小贵花将为各位雅思考生具体的讲解一下雅思写作中的一些实用的表达细节和技巧,帮助大家突破雅思写作这个瓶颈。
避免使用语言弱的“be”动词
很多的雅思考生在写作中喜欢用“be”,虽然不能说这样的表达是不对的,但还是尽量避免为好。下面我们看看有哪些是可以将它代替的更加高级的表达。
1、在“here”或“there”开头的句子中,把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语
例如:
1) Weak:There is no opportunity for promotion.
Revision:No opportunity for promotion exists.
2) Weak:Here are the books you ordered.
Revision:The books you ordered have arrived.
2、表语转换为不同的修饰语
例如:
Weak:The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
Or:The landscape,bare and brown,begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
3、作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词
例如:
1) Weak:The team members are good players.
Revision:The team members play well.
2) Weak:One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
Revision:One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
表语转化为不同的修饰语
很多雅思考生都不明白什么时候用主动,什么被动!广州学为贵雅思写作名师Rachel老师在这里提醒大家在雅思写作大作文中千万别用错了,一旦用错,雅思写作分数自然不高!广州学为贵雅思写作名师Rachel老师为大家带来了一个例子,一同分析一下。
1、Weak:The organization has been supported by charity.
Better:Charity has supported the organization.
2、Weak:The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
Better:Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
使用具体的动词
这一点,相信不少雅思考生都知道。但是比较具体运用技巧,这里还是为大家仔细讲解一下。经过对比发现,这样的描写会让文章看起来更有说服力,分数自然就能提高。
例如:
1、Poor:My supervisor went past my desk.
Better:My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
2、Poor:She is a careful shopper.
Better:She compares prices and quality.
不要使用语言过长且累赘的词语
敲黑板啦!!!这个点千万要记住!雅思写作不是拼文笔,不少用的词汇越高深就越高分,想提高成绩就要用词简单,生动,有说服力。
例如:
1、Wordy:My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
Improved:My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
2、Wordy:We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
Improved:We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
3、Redundant:We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
Improved:We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
4、Redundant:My sister and I bought the same,identical dress in different stores.
Improved:My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
避免陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语
这个tips和上面说的基本相同,希望每一位雅思考生都能正确认识到雅思就是一门语言考试,主要考察雅思考生们的语言运用能力,而写作关键点就在文章的表现力上!不要仗着自己有点英语基础,运用那些难懂的专业术语。基础不好的也多积累收集,反复使用陈旧词句也是很难得高分的。看看下面的例子,这样改是不是好很多呢?
1、Weak:They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
Improved:They will not agree to any of his proposals.
2、Weak:I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
Improved:I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
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