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Write a few paragraphs about the buildings in your city or country. Describe the tallest buildings or unusual architecture. Make sure you effectively convey your attitude toward the features you describe.
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A Monumental Wickerwork located in the heart of Chengdu, a western Chinese metropolis of 14 million people, Tianfu Square has been renovated and upgraded as the most visited city sightseeing. With an area about the size of twelve soccer fields, it is considered the largest urban square in the region. A huge museum of science dominates the north side; the city’s biggest thoroughfares go past south of the square. Situated on the west side, the architects of the new city museum are monumental. Its construction covers an area of 65,000m², including departments of natural history, national history and customs, an 800-seat hall for Chinese shadow puppetry, as well as a 1,000m² area for special exhibitions. The new building did not become a forbidding block. What make its difference are the distinct folds in the building’s curvature and its copper-clad façades. The access areas of the museum are located on its east side. They open onto the square with a glazed façade sheltered from the sun by copper webbing. The windowless exhibition rooms are on the closed west face of the building, which is clad with folded copper sheeting in a unique wickerwork aesthetic. A gateway through the building%% links Tianfu Square with the Huangcheng Mosque, one of Southwest China’s largest Muslim places of worship. The resulting roofed-in free space is used in many ways. Museum halls inside the building are 30-metre deep, support-free. In order to absorb the shocks of an earthquake, the new construction goes as deeply as 24 meters under the ground, resting in a gigantic concrete box set into the earth for decoupling seismic activity. The façade structure – lightly veiled on the east side, completely closed to the west – follows the principles of the Chinese philosophy of feng-shui, which state that west-facing buildings bring bad luck. Moreover, it also works with the local climate conditions and the direct sunlight. The webbing and sheeting used consist of 90% recycled copper. The alloy was chosen so that the sheeting would discolor as little as possible in some-degree polluted air.
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