题目
Write a paragraph reviewing a presentation you recently attended or gave. You can write about the parts of the presentation and the charts and other visuals. Make sure you include good and bad points.
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Expression: You expressed yourself well when you said “From the very beginning, I have to pay my admiral attention to his professional manner”. This demonstrates your ability to articulate yourself. Expression: You also used your past simple well, such as when you said “He gave many statistic figures, comparisons and results of social researches”.
Last Saturday, I hosted a routine gathering of Reader’s Club in Chengdu. We were honored to have Professor Li as our key speaker, whose lecturing topic was "The Retrogression of Our Justice System." From the very beginning, I have to pay my admiral attention to his professional manner. His confidence summoned all attentions in the room where hundreds of audience were expecting something new from him. Following a short opening greeting, Prof. Li called attentions with a touching story of a civil rights lawyer. Then, with smooth transition to the main course, he gave many statistic figures, comparisons and results of social researches to support his main theme. To finalize, hesummarizeshis points with simple, clear but strong words. However, one thing he could have done differently, I think, was to use visual aids. Few pictures, bar graphs, flowcharts or pie charts would have given more analytical thoughts. And more%%, had he given a big finishing, for example, calling for actions or providing solutions to the problems, the speech would have been more successful.
写作挑战调查：95分数
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